The Game

    This is a story about a game I had. In this story are a few idioms. This story I tried my very best to fit in the idioms. I hope you like it! 

    This is the hardest game I have ever played. The Bulldogs were getting away with murder. They were pushing, shoving and hurting the players. Two of my teammates got hurt because of them.  The referee didn't throw the book at them for breaking the rules.

    When the defender wasn't looking they shot a goal on us. When they made a goal the coach said we were up the creek without a paddle. Then we started to play harder.

     Then about two minutes later we shot a goal on them. Then the coach felt better and said that we weren’t on a thin line anymore. A few seconds or minutes later they scored another goal. Then we made another goal and at least 6min. before they game was over the scored another goal on us. We were on a very thin line then cause 5 minutes had past and there was only 1 minute left. Then the buzzard went off and we lost our very first game. The coach felt down in the dumps when we lost.

                Can you make up a story using idioms?

Comments

[Mrs. Meeler]

Marisela:

I can definately try to make up a story using idioms, maybe I'll post it on blogwrite!

Your story was great and the idioms you choose fit in very well. Remember to continue to use idioms in your future posts.

The story would have been better if you used more descriptive words and details. You could have described the soccer field, the players, and expressed feelings with your word choice. Did you use dialogue?

Try going back and editing this post so that it is more descriptive.

[graciela]

Marisela i really liked your story it had plenty of idioms as possible and it was packed with details, im sorry you lost your first game. Hopely you will win next time.