Beds

    Ideas and content-cover,sheets,matress,pillow.

     Organization-What's the color?

     Vioce-sheets with curious anious.

     Sentence fluency- Beds cocome in all shapes and sizes.      

        Conventions-pillow for the pillow case of the pillow wouldn't be shown.

       Word Choice-cover to match sheets and the pillow case.

       

Comments

[Anne Davis]

Hi Jadae,
I found your metaphor to be most interesting! Remember though to use spell check. You want your work to be the best possible! I was not sure just what you were suggesting for voice. I'm curious about that one.

I always enjoy reading your posts so do all you can do to make your writing shine! You are a smart student!

Mrs. Davis