The New and Improved Post

  As you see I had to redo my first post which had many mistakes.So now It's much more less detailed and not just in a long paragraph like before. I hope you like my new and improved post.

   Hey I'm Graciela. As you see this year I will get to have my very own weblog. In which it is called Graciela's Buzzin' Weblog.

  I can't believe this is our first post. Which is very important to me.At the time I feel like learning more about weblogging and at the other time I feel like I want this year to end fast. Well lets talk more about me for example the things I like, how I am, what I like, all the kind of things people would like to learn about me.

   Ok, I'm ten years old, I was born in Los Angeles,California. And I have a sister that is 18 years old and brother that is 21. My favorite animals are cats, puppies, and guinea pigs. I especially like taking pictures of my pets.

   This may be weird but I like collecting many varieties of rocks. I also have many cousins at this school. Believe me it is a very long list. Last year my cousin Estefany, also had her own weblog , Which I read, believe me she is a very detailed person.

   Oh and her sister Zuleyma is also well known, because she got to go to Washington D.C. Which is pretty cool.I hope someday I'll get to go somewhere important too.But what I'm worrying about right now are my grades and participating in many things.

   I hope that children all over the country should understand that sometimes their teachers yell at them because their teachers want them to pay attention in class because their knowledge is important in the future.

        Do you think I should of added more details in my new and improved post?

Comments

[Mrs. Meeler]

The details and paragraphs really improved your post! It may be difficult now, but as we continue to write and blog throughout the year, incorporating the writing tips will get easier. Hopefully, using vivid vocabulary, details, correct punctuation and grammar will become so natural that you will do it out of habit. However, writing is a process that takes a lifetime to perfect!

What is the most difficult aspect of writing for you?

[megan]

Wow it's really cool that you are blogging now! I didnt start blogging up until a couple of years ago, and I'm 18 now. I love to blog, and I hope that you have a fun time with it too!