I am re-doing '' Going to the Beach '' because I thought there was a lot of mistakes. I am also doing it because we are learning how to proofread.Tell me if you like this one better.
Going to the Beach Redo
Tuesday night my mom told my sister and me," We are going to the beach." My sister and I were so exited that we went to our room and cleaned up a bit so we could pack up our stuff.
The next day we woke up at 5:30 in the morning to put everything in our car.After that my mom got a call from my brother.He told me to go to the internet and look for the directions to get to the beach.
We left at 9:00 so why mom could get money from the bank. on the way there was a lot of laughing.There was also a lot of yelling because my mom was geting really tired of hearing us laugh. We were telling to much jokes ang sag and doing funny things.
Six hours later we got to the hotel. The first thing we did was un-pack (duh).After that we went to Wal-Mart there we bought suoviners, sunscreen,floats,and I got an air brush T-shirt.
When we got back to the hotel we went to the beach my mom and I were the only ones who got in the water. My sister didn't want to get in because she wanted to find shells. Then we went to the pool but before we went in we had to get rinsed off.
The next few days we stayed at the hotel all day. But today we went to a place where we can ride boats. We payed a lot of money, but it was worth it.
When we got on the boat we felt kind of scared. We left the docks and were on our way. We saw dolphins and a lot of jelly fish. I counted 99. When we got to Shell Island we went on the long bridge and got to the sand. It was kind of hard because the bridge was broken because of a hurricane that happend there last year. When I got there I knew why they call Shell Island. We got to stay there for an hour then we had to go.
The next day we left to go home. There was still some laughter.
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